Our Father Ok, this isn't very good, since I suck at rhyming, but wanted to have some rhyme here anyway. So try to ignore it when it all falls apart. :) Thanks!
Our Father, who art in Heaven
Hollow be thy name
Or so it would appear
Since thy followers
Hold not thy Love dear
The grea-*test*-('") commandments
We were told: Love God
Not gold
Love one another
Just as we’ve been shown
Judge not, lest ye be judged
But they have replaced ye,
Oh Highest Judge
Thou art too lenient
“Forgive,” you say
“Condemn,” they demand
They wear thy cross
They proclaim thy name
Yet the fires of hatred they inflame
Ignoring the plight of their poor brothers
Fighting those whose sin is to love another
Think me not arrogant O Lord
But tis Thee I pity
Tis thy creation gone astray
Who pervert Thy name
And take Thy place
But have hope
For I have seen true believers
They walk among us still
And for them it is truly:
Our Father, who art in heaven
Hallowed be thy name.
raspswirl- 09-12-2005
Oh Cloud, Where does all this come from? You seriously got it. And you gave me a goosebumps. :)
Whatever it is that you're trying to do in life should really be melted with your writing.
I am so inspired by that piece I can't even tell you. :D
KEEP POSTING MORE!!! :P
JustAnotherLight- 09-19-2005
That's beautiful! I can relate to it. Very true.
SteelLily- 09-19-2005
*sniffle* i love it denise. i totally feel the same way.
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