View Full Version: Quick little poem

toriamos >>Creative Corner >>Quick little poem


<< Prev | Next >>

PickOutYourCloud- 09-11-2005
Quick little poem
When I look at you Everything slides away Nothing can interfere With this joy But behind the sunshine The thunder growls The distant rumble A warning of what may come Yet I feel you near me Your presence in my very veins The storm may come But it will only be rain

JustAnotherLight- 09-11-2005

That's cool Cloud! It paints a picture for me. Love it.

PickOutYourCloud- 09-11-2005

Thanks again! :D

raspswirl- 09-11-2005

Behind the sunshine the thunder does growl. I love it. This one little poem reflects a lot in only a few verses. It really made me think and picture things. Good Job! :)

Precious-Earthquakes- 09-11-2005

I think there is a word for things that are short, but hold a lot. Hold on, let me think of it, I am not used to using good vocab. OK, I think it is "pithy" I think the word is "pithy." OK, now my brain hurts, and I shouldn't ever try and think or talk like that again....ouch, Precious

SteelLily- 09-11-2005

i love how you use imagery from nature to reflect human emotion. Nature inspires me so much and I always appreciate a good piece about it. I almost wanted to say nature infects me and I guess that is kind of true....you know what I mean, right? :?: anyway, i like it.

PickOutYourCloud- 09-11-2005

i love how you use imagery from nature to reflect human emotion. Nature inspires me so much and I always appreciate a good piece about it. I almost wanted to say nature infects me and I guess that is kind of true....you know what I mean, right? :?: anyway, i like it. Definitely know what you mean. That's one of the things I love about your writing as well! Especially River God. And no, I won't write the rest of it! That's your baby and you tell her story so wonderfully! :D

Forumer™ is Voted #1 Free Forum Hosting provider
Build your own community today with the largest message board hosting company.