So I figured, why wait?
I like to write very much, I wouldn't say I'm great at it, but it's a passion of mine. Most of my creative energy has been spent lately working on a weird story but it's very long now so I won't post it. I am in need of some critiques for some new stuff I've written so any and all commentary is appreciated. Be mean if you must, but be constructive about it. Thank you in advance to everybody who responds. :D This is extremely new and this is her unveiling so please be honest about her. Disenchanted Fairytale Centered in her fearscape stands her ivory tower The demons guarding it steal all her power With blood on their teeth, they await to devour Her soul—it’s gone from here Watching the tornado ravage the plain Off in the distance it’s calling her name So she crawls inside time and again ‘Cause she’s starving to outrun the rain —Starving to outrun the rain Holding a declined RSVP from Prince Charming Says he’s off with another princess doing some farming The reality she finds herself in is slowly disarming Her soul—it’s gone from here Watching the tornado ravage the plain Off in the distance it’s calling her name So she crawls inside time and again ‘Cause she’s starving to outrun the rain —Starving to outrun the rain Summon the courage, whatever it takes How long before this bough breaks Proving—with the tears from my heart aches That my soul is gone from here So I’m watching this tornado ravage my plain Here in my head it’s calling my name But I can’t crawl inside to fight it again I was starving to outrun this rain Now, I am consumed by this pain And the poison that is the rain
I like to write very much, I wouldn't say I'm great at it, but it's a passion of mine. Most of my creative energy has been spent lately working on a weird story but it's very long now so I won't post it. I am in need of some critiques for some new stuff I've written so any and all commentary is appreciated. Be mean if you must, but be constructive about it. Thank you in advance to everybody who responds. :D This is extremely new and this is her unveiling so please be honest about her. Disenchanted Fairytale Centered in her fearscape stands her ivory tower The demons guarding it steal all her power With blood on their teeth, they await to devour Her soul—it’s gone from here Watching the tornado ravage the plain Off in the distance it’s calling her name So she crawls inside time and again ‘Cause she’s starving to outrun the rain —Starving to outrun the rain Holding a declined RSVP from Prince Charming Says he’s off with another princess doing some farming The reality she finds herself in is slowly disarming Her soul—it’s gone from here Watching the tornado ravage the plain Off in the distance it’s calling her name So she crawls inside time and again ‘Cause she’s starving to outrun the rain —Starving to outrun the rain Summon the courage, whatever it takes How long before this bough breaks Proving—with the tears from my heart aches That my soul is gone from here So I’m watching this tornado ravage my plain Here in my head it’s calling my name But I can’t crawl inside to fight it again I was starving to outrun this rain Now, I am consumed by this pain And the poison that is the rain