The Closet
She was just a girl Hiding in a closet The footsteps coming closer She wanted to just scream Give herself up She couldn’t stand it He was bound to find her It was a poor place to hide She always went there The footfalls stop before the door She closed her eyes If she couldn’t see him, he couldn’t see her If only it were that simple.

Ahhhh, I love it. You know I can read this stuff all day :P :P :P

horrible. but well wrote

Hey, what do you mean 'horrible'? I don't think you got it. It reminded me when I was young and I hid from my dad b/c I knew I was in trouble for something I know I did that was wrong. It's something that I related to. (or that's just the way I saw it).

Ok, a lot of people get different things from this poem, which literally just came to me as I was typing random stuff on Word last night. I really like the idea that everyone can bring their own experiences to it and it is interesting to see how everyone interprets it. But I feel a bit compelled to share my own thoughts about it. When I first started writing it, and until about the last stanza, I was thinking of hide-and-seek. I loved playing that came, but I did always hide in the same place on the few occassions we played inside (usually we played outside). Also, being the strange child that I was, when I'd be hiding in that closet, I would be thinking about Jews hiding from Nazis during various raids (I read a lot of literature on the Holocaust starting in 4th grade). I would become so overwhelmed by these thoughts that I just wanted to jump out of the closet and admit to my brother that he found me, just to shake myself out of it. But as I got to the end of the poem, I realized that it also sounded very much like it was coming from the point of view of an abused child desperately trying to hide from her abuser. I was thus a little hesitant to post the poem, because I was worried that people would react badly to it, that it might bring up painful memories for people who had gone through it. But in the end, I felt that I had to share it and for anyone that this poem hurt, I am truly sorry. it was not my intention. So anyway, a long story for a little poem. Thanks for the comments. I'm always glad to see a response to anything I write, either way.

you know i think it's wonderfully written Denise, as is all of your stuff.

thats what i meant well written, i didnt like the idea if she was closing her eyes, he might not see her, as she was obviously trying to hide. as for hide and seek yes it is very innonence, like pick a cloud said i took it in another light. thats why i said horrible, maybe i overreacted. im not offended i like honesty. i was actually thinking of some little one hiding from an abuser. so horrible was a reaction. if i was thinking hide and seek as i can its a wonderful well written. just these days there are so many sorry stories you hear on the news, and in papers.

Don't worry, I don't think you overreacted. If your gut tells you its horrible, that's totally fine. This is a hard one. I have mixed feelings about it myself. Taken in the light of an abuser, it is a horrible subject. It's perfectly okay to feel that way about it. I apprecaite it when people take the time to respond, no matter how they feel about the actual piece. Thanks!

Re: The Closet
Wow this is really really good and well written poem. I can feel the different touches to it by different readers. Here's another idea of it, it's just mine. I see it as a young lesbian girl trying to hide her sexuality from people. She hasn't accepted herself in the poem yet. And teh subjec matter of "he" , I see it as a guy who pays attention to the girl and is interested in her, but all she can do is hide from him and avoid getting into a situation where she has to tell the truth to him. If she couldn’t see him, he couldn’t see her If only it were that simple. She wishes that guys would leave her alone and see her as she sees them. This was a lot of mess , I'm sorry, btu this poem has just so many aspects!

wow, that's AWESOME! I wish I'd thought of that ;) But seriously, I'm very impressed. I really like that interpretation. It is so cool to see how different people read different things!

And so cool that we can agree to disagree. I respect everyone's opinions and i'm glad we can express ourselves and not be rude or get upset over what other people think. We are adults here and should learn to be open and accepting to other peoples thoughts. :P Gosh, everyone is so nice here. I love it love it love it :D

^Just tell me about it! Let's not be afraid to get too lovvey <3 I agree also with agree to disagree, because everyone agrees that we are allowed to disagree :shock: